How do I write a professional review?
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The following shows a number of submissions and examples of professional reviews.
Submission Type: Tag line
Submission: Fast focused feedback through better business decisions
|Review#||Review comment||Professional Review?|
The term "focused feedback" is not a phrase most people would understand. Also, it is unclear what you mean by "better business decisions". The use of alliteration seems "too cute" and reduces the impact of the tag line. It is not clear what it is trying to say, or sell.
|Yes. It suggests that you change the phrase "focused feedback" and asks you to show how it relates to "better business decisions". Thus, it is clear, useful, and actionable.|
|2||I have no idea of what type of service or product you are offering. There also seems to be too many adjectives. This makes the tag line too long.||Yes. It says that your tag line does not convey a clear message and you need to make the tag line shorter.|
|3||I don't think it works.||No. It is not useful nor does it offer any actionable advice.|
|4||It is clear and effective. It should appeal to a business audience.||Yes. It is actionable since it says that you are ready to go to market with this tag line. Note that even though it disagrees with the other reviews, it is clear, useful (no further changes are needed), and applicable (this is the tag line you should use). This review may be an argument for getting more than one review.|
Submission Type: Business idea
The Fair Trade movement has been growing in popularity in last 10 years due to greater awareness of how little money Third World farmers make. Commodities like coffee, corn, and certain fruits have proven to be good exports. Greater appreciation for these different cultures has also been noticed. Also, many hundreds of thousands of people have emigrated to Canada over the past 20 years.
At the same time, women have grown bored with mass produced jewelry and have shown a new interest in custom pieces. Over the past 5 years, sales of gold and silver jewelry have dropped at commercial gift and jewelry shops in Canada, according to Retail Magazine.
My idea is to import both handmade jewelry and custom-made (by special order) handmade pieces to Canada and to market them at Consuls, tourist bureaus, travel agencies, the multitude of small boutiques and through street vendors, and during community, cultural. and craft shows.
|Review#||Review Comment||Professional Review?|
|1||This is a nice idea, but I don't see how you could make enough money at it to make a go of it. Jewelry is a buyer's market so you'd have to sell a ton of these things make a living. How would you know just how much each vendor got for one of your pieces? Is one question that occurred to me. And you'd also to compensate the sellers. Perhaps setting up a non-profit to promote this idea could work.||Yes. It is clear and offers useful and applicable advice.|
|2||I applaud your interest in fair trade. However, the margins from the business model you are talking about are very slim. For example, while jewelery is sold in the outlets you mentioned, you have not talked about how you would get into those distribution channels. The cost of most jewelry at retail is not in the materials themselves, but in the distribution and sales to the various channels. While I am prepared to believe that there is a decline in the purchase of gold and silver, that does not imply that there is an increase in purchases of other types of jewelry. Lastly, discretionary spending for things like jewelry decreases during troubled times.||Yes. The advisor has told the author that he/she needs a distribution model to support their assertions about the market. Also, by implication, more information is needed about competitive pressures like the economy and other jewelry manufacturers.|
|3||With so many forms of jewelry and the difficult economic times, I don't see this idea working.||No. It does not offer any direction or useful advice. For example, the advisor could have suggested the author explore niche markets.|